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Example One: If you notice, none of my sentences start with the same word, in the same paragraph.
Persuaded Chapter 13:
He did!? I smiled and rolled my eyes. “Oh, please. What do you care anyway?”
My flippant reply seemed to check him. Gregory squinted his eyes and looked away for a moment, before he brought his chocolate gaze back to mine. “You know, I may have to answer that one day. Do me a favor and keep asking, okay?”
Keep asking what? “What?” I grinned; I couldn’t help it. Gregory looked so unbelievably hot with those dark eyes smoldering into mine. Flirting wasn’t my strong point; I never thought I had fully mastered the art. Okay, fully mastered? Who am I kidding? That would imply that I actually practiced doing it first. And since I had never done any such thing, I wasn’t exactly prepared for Gregory’s next words. But I had a strong suspicion the guy was flirting with me.
There are creative ways to start you sentences... other, better ways--you've just got to find them.
Example Two: Watch carefully how I overuse the word arm(arms) in this paragraph. I did awesome on making sure each of my sentences started differently, but forgot to check inside that paragraph.
Persuaded, Chapter 15--
After a few more minutes; my aching muscles had turned to putty in his hands. Gregory ran his fingers down my arms to my elbows and gently turned me back around to face him. When he released his hold on me, I looked up and smiled. He had his arms outstretched, wide and inviting. I didn’t hesitate or think; I just stepped forward, wrapped my arms around his waist and snuggled against his chest. Tenderly his arms folded around me. We stayed like that for a while in the darkened lobby of the hospital. I wondered briefly what it would be like to always be held by Gregory.
FIRST I want you to go through your manuscripts and catch your double trouble. <--this is crucial. I can be giving you all the tips in the world, but if you're not applying them, then I'm wasting my breath! Lol!
SECOND You can do one of two things in the comment section: I'd like you to either fix my paragraph above, trying to only use the word ARMS once. Or, you can show me one of your double trouble paragraphs that you fixed.
Thank you so much for coming on by! Hope this helps! Can't wait to see what you put down.
